Submitted External Reviews Not Showing Up On Movie Page?

I see two possible issues here:

1. These submissions were sent only about a week ago, so the might still be pending. It takes 2 to 10 days in most cases for data to be processed, but it can take longer in some cases.
   
2. More importantly: the description field only includes the name of the author of the review but not the name of the publication. This will almost certainly lead to the submission being discarded.
   

As per the guidelines listed at http://www.imdb.com/updates/guide/tit... the format for the description field is:

WebsiteName [ReviewerName]

E.g.

New York Times [Joe Bloggs]
Variety.com [Mike Reviewer]
SomeOtherSiteorBlog [Virgil Writer]
etc.

Your submissions only include the name of the reviewer -- you should try again and be sure to include the full description with the site/publication name.